今天周四啦，大家早上好，AmyLee来叫大家起床啦！不许偷懒，托福优秀范文一天写一篇学一篇哦，写好了可以发送至我邮箱keke3096@qq.com进行互批，共同进步!^^

我已经托福三战过了，对考试各方面都很熟悉，所以大家到考前了有什么疑惑也可以发邮件给我，我会尽力为大家解答。

每天的写作任务是这样的，写好每天的作文发至我的邮箱（如果你想加入作文批改小组请注明），我们将进入互批作文模式。

在此我对每天的topic进行解析和范文精讲，请大家写完作文之后不忘进行比较，找出自己的不足之处。开始吧！

5. A company has announced that it wishes to builda large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantagesof this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory?Explain your position.

Topic 5 A factory in your community

As the company has announced to build afactory right here in our community, I am so eager to（非常迫切）say a few words toward thisissue. I really think that if the plan is carried out in the near feature finally, there will be much more disadvantages than advantages to be brought tothe quality life of our social community.（作者给出了否定的观点，通过上下文我们感受到作者的心情时比较急切的）

Of course, during these years' highunemployment rate（高失业率）, introducingof such a large factory will consume unemployed workforce in some respects（在某些方面）. A family may increase theirincome by taking account of（考虑到）its new employed father during or after the construction of thefactory, local government can increase its tax income and retail dealers（零售商）of our community may sell alittle more because of the increasing of population that may be the result ofthe new build factory. However, all these benefits may seem to be so small when compared with all those disadvantages the new build factory may lead to.

The most hateful thing is that you may notable to smell the fresh air in the sunny Sunday mornings because this huge industrial monster will probably deliver a great deal of waste fume（烟）and waste materials（废料）every day, far more than the amount you can imagine. And far more disappointed than this, those rumbling（隆隆不息的，形容工厂）, non-stopping stream lines in the factory can make noises loud enough to bereave people of our tranquil town out of sweat dreams.（请关注本段中量词的用法，如the amount）

And you will no doubt feel uncomfortable to drive your family to the camping place because maybe the establishment（确立）of the new factory will bringmore than 20% increases in population as well 30% increases in using of privatecars and trucks, imaging how could it be in the street in rush hours, or evenin the holidays. So, you can see clearly that increasing in population is not always good news for a small community like ours.（工厂会增加人口，社区会变得日益拥挤）

Basic food prices may probably rise and public transportation will burden more, which usually means poor services,public schools and community facilities which once made us feel so convenient living in this small town may get harder and harder to be attended or utilizedas the increasing of population, upon all those disadvantages, why should wegive applauses to the announcement of the company?（文章写到的不利方面还是很全面的，不过个人认为可以展开得更细一些。结尾反问句，很新颖。）

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