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2016年2月27日雅思写作解析及语料库(新东方版)

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  【社会类】
  In many countries women allowed to take maternity leave from their jobs during the first months after the birth of their babies. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages? 很多女性在生产后一个月会休产假,是否利大于弊?(2016年2月27日)
  【作家立场】 女性休产假利大于弊。
  【思路拓展】
  【女性休产假的利好】
  ① 一个女子愿意为了男子十月怀胎,那么,她一定是深爱着这个男子。未来爱的结晶会让这份情感坚如盘石,绵长悠远。人非草木,看到即将临盆的妻子忍受身体的负重带来的痛苦,准爸爸定会精心呵护母子,准妈妈可以充分享受待产所带来的难得的清闲。因此,女性待产是很好的增进夫妻纽带的契机。
  ② 对于新生婴儿而言,女性休假可以保障他们的健康成长。
  【女性休产假的弊端】
  ① 对于一些产妇而言,休产假可能成为她们职场晋升的阻碍,因为企业即要为待产的妈妈承担一部分的福利,又要暂时舍弃一些职场精英可能为企业创造价值的机会,因此,当很多中层女性管理者回归企业之后,可能发现她们已经失去了宝贵的职业晋升的机会。
  ② 勤奋工作也是一种惯性,待产休假可能会使悠闲生活成为一种惯性,因此,妈妈们在待产期间即可能产生职业倦怠,也必然会有职业技能的退化。

  【范文赏析】
  【首段】背景介绍 + 作家立场
  Giving a birth to a baby tops all in terms of consolidating relationship between partners of life and feeling well-being of matrimony. To ensure the health of both pregnant women and new-born babies, maternity leave is a common practice among many enterprises around the globe. This is definitely a beneficial practice for would-be parents even if taking a paid leave might bring about some problems.
  【二段】妈妈休产假的利好
  Advantages can be manifold for those new mothers if they can rest for a while. First, maternity leave can be a splendid opportunity for those great mothers to carefully attend to their infants because newborn babies are so
delicate that they need mother’s love. Secondly, taking paid leave is a golden chance to strengthen the family tie. Witnessing the arduousness of wives, every father will be moved and thus spare no efforts to take intensive care of their beloved. A newborn baby is a fruit of deep love, the process of going through thick and thin together will make marital life as solid as a rock and marriage bonds as deep as ocean. Last,pregnancy can be a bitter-sweet process during which every mother will sacrifice a great deal both physically and mentally. In this sense, mothers can take a good rest and fully recover from the hardship of operation.
  【三段】妈妈休产假的弊端
  However, there is no garden without weeds. Even though what will be gained is greater than what will be lost, some problems might ensue. On the downsides, the first drawback is that many mothers, especially those females who take managerial positions, have to momentarily forgo their endeavors they have made and the experiences they have accumulated, which might be sort of potential barrier for climbing the career ladder when they return to workplace. Even worse, some mothers are likely to be the first to lose their jobs during an economic downturn. Another potential problem is that hard work is a habit-formation. Likewise, laziness can also be habitual, when relaxing pace of life grows on those mothers, some of them might generate a sense of job burnout and the degradation of professional skills is inevitable.
  【尾段】再次亮明观点
  In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that even though maternal leave might make it difficult for some mothers to fit back into the routine of the work days and be passed over for promotions, to be a mother is a must for every female. When mothers finish their dreams of having a baby and strive for their babies’ rosy future, their motivation can be highly stimulated, in this sense, allowing internal employees to take a paid leave is a win-win strategy for both female workers and relevant enterprises.

  【创作感言】
  本篇有感而发,自由写作、主题明确、逻辑清晰、文风顺畅、词汇精准、句法多变,符合雅思写作之四项评分标准,可为赏析学习之佳作。雅思写作不仅是考察作者对于语言的驾驭能力,更加考察一个人的人生阅历和生命体验。勤于思考,勤奋练笔,写作能力自然水到渠成。原创范文只是雅思写作之一种,文无定法。建议考生打造属于自己的个性范文。

  【经典语料】
  1. infant 婴儿
  2. give a birth to a baby 生孩子
  3. would-be fathers 准爸爸
  4. pregnant women = would-be mothers 准妈妈
  5. take paid leave = maternity leave带薪休假
  6. Giving a birth to a baby tops all in terms of consolidating relationship between partners of life and feeling well-being of matrimony. 在巩固家庭关系和享受婚姻幸福方面,养育子女是最重要的因素。
  7. Witnessing the arduousness of wives, every father will be moved and thus spare no efforts to take intensive care of their beloved. 见证妻子育儿的辛苦,每一个爸爸都会被感动,因此,他们会竭尽全力去精心照料他们的爱人。
  8. A newborn baby is a fruit of deep love, the process of going through sick and thin together will make marital life as solid as a rock and marriage bonds as deep as ocean. 新生命是爱的结晶,风雨同舟的育儿过程会使婚姻坚如磐石,夫妻感情深如大海。
  9. is a golden chance to strengthen the family tie 是增强家庭纽带的良好契机
  10. However, there is no garden without weeds. 然而,凡事皆有利弊。
  11. When relaxing pace of life grows on those mothers, some of them might generate a sense of job burnout 当一些妈妈喜欢上了休闲的生活节奏,她们也许会产生一种职业倦怠。
  12. Mothers have to momentarily forgo their endeavors they have made and the experiences they have accumulated. 妈妈们不得不暂时放弃已经做出的努力和积累的经验。
  13. might be sort of potential barrier for climbing the career ladder 也许会成为攀登事业阶梯的阻碍
  14. might make it difficult for some mothers to fit back into the routine of the work days 使一些妈妈很难再适应日常工作的常规事务
  15. Allowing internal employees to take a paid leave is a win-win strategy for both female workers and relevant enterprises. 允许内部职员带薪休产假对于企业和员工而言,是互利共赢。

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opportunity [.ɔpə'tju:niti]

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n. 机会,时机

 
barrier ['bæriə]

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n. 界线,屏障,栅栏,障碍物

 
stimulated

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adj. 受激的 v. 刺激(stimulate的过去式

 
pregnancy ['pregnənsi]

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n. 怀孕

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strengthen ['streŋθən]

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v. 加强,变坚固

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relevant ['relivənt]

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adj. 相关的,切题的,中肯的

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professional [prə'feʃənl]

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adj. 职业的,专业的,专门的
n. 专业人

 
inevitable [in'evitəbl]

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adj. 不可避免的,必然(发生)的

 
habitual [hə'bitjuəl]

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adj. 惯常的,习惯的

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internal [in'tə:nəl]

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adj. 国内的,内在的,身体内部的

 

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